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The chart belows shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years

The chart belows shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years
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The pie graph depicted above shows the percentage breakdown of the present occupational outcomes of anthropology
graduates
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. The table
on the other hand
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 illustrates the salaries of anthropology
graduates
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 after 5 years of
work
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.
Firstly
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, when analyzing the pie graph it is evident that 52% of all
graduates
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 managed to find full-time employment.
This
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 is
subsequently
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 followed by
graduates
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 who chose part-time
work
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 at 15%.
Furthermore
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, approximately 12% are currently unemployed.
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, 8% of
graduates
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 obtained entry into postgraduate study. Meanwhile, the outcomes of 8% of
graduates
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 are currently unknown.
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, 5% opted for both part-time
work
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 and post-graduate study.
Secondly
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, when studying the table given above it is evident that after 5 years of
work
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 experience, freelance consultants and government jobs provided the most money
while
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 private companies generally offered lesser financial compensation except at the lower salary groups.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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