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The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts provide details regarding 3
matter
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 for usage
the
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 Internet in Australia's population slipt by 5 age groups.
Overall
, it can be seen
emailings
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emailing
 took the highest place among the reasons,
while
 there are similar levels in percentages of the
emialing
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emailing
 and the paying bills.
According to
 the information, social media has the lowest proportion, over 40% in the total Internet consumption and come
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percantages
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percentages
percentage
 by
ages
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age
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this
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decrease
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 significantly from 100% to just over 20% about
the
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5 times decline
while
population
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the population
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aging
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ageing
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 is increasing. Looking
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 other two using kind of the Internet in more detail, it is evident that emailing is the leader with 70% of the
entire
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users which has the
most
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highest
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 rate
by
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in
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40
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the 40
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-60 and over 65 age groups
about
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at about
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 80%.
The both
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 two groups below 40 age make up
from
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60%
in
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of
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 sending
email
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emails
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. The same ratios even the levels of percentages
is
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are
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experianced
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experienced
 in online paying bills over the ages.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • usage patterns
  • highlighting variations
  • compare and contrast
  • primary reasons
  • identify differences
  • age brackets
  • usage purposes
  • popularity
  • online shopping
  • banking
  • Internet use
  • age groups
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