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The figure shows demographic trends in Scotland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature.

The figure shows demographic trends in Scotland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature.
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The provided line graph depicts information about the proportion of the
birth
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rate
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 in Scotland in a
period
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 of time between 1940 with the perspective of 2030. Units are measured in percentage. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that despite all the fluctuations the
Birth
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 and
Population
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growth
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 rates are going to gradually decrease,
whereas
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 the Death
rate
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 has tended to rise. At the beginning of the given
period
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, the
birth
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rate
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 commenced with the
rate
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 of quarter. The
birth
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 data for Scotland from that point started to fluctuate and from 1960 year when indices equalled 20%, the
growth
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 of the
population
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 started drastically
drop
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with expectations to reach a mere 5% in 2040. The
Population
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Growth
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Rate
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 has a similar negative trend. There is
noticeable
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abrupt surge in the
period
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 between 1950 and 1960 years when the
Growth
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rate
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 indices reached 15%, though there was a gradual dropping process which equalled nil in 2004. There was a peak point equalled 15% in the 1940 year for the Death
rate
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, which started drastically dropping from that
period
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.
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 in 2000, it reached an insignificant minority of nearly 5%, though from 2010 to 2040 there was an expectation of increasing in the death of the
population
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, period, population, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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