The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The three pie charts
illustrates
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ratio
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the ratio
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of three various
kind
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of food that can
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be unheathy
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unheathy
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unhealthy
healthy
for human bodies if it takes more than it should consume namely sodium ,saturated fat and added
sugar
in four meals .
Overall
, the most significant about the graph is the dominant percentage
for
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soudium
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sodium
and saturated fat is
dinner
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at dinner
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meal
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.
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while
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,
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dominant
percent
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for added
sugar
is
snacks
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. For breakfast meal the got a worldly value it almost equal 16 to14 per cent in all three nutrients .
as well as
lunch the percentage roughly the same by 29 to 19%. For dinner meals the sodium record the highest percentage
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43 % .
In addition
, added
sugar
is less
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10% ,
However
, snacks are completely the opposite. Added
sugar
reaches the highest number 42% .
while
, sodium is the lowest
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14 per cent. For saturated fat
fr
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for
dinner and snacks the the average number is 37% and 21% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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