The carts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts represent the arrangement of the three nutrients—sodium, saturated fat, and added
sugar
, among the
food consuming
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times in the USA.
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, the consumption of sodium and saturated fats is almost the same, with around 40
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both
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of them,
while
added
sugar
is being eaten mostly with
snacks
, which is
also
about 40
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.Breakfast is a meal when sodium and saturated fats are mostly gained. The next meal after them is lunch, with 29% and 26% respectively. Another source of sodium
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dinner and
snacks
, with 14% each of them. The statistics of saturated fats are quite different, with 21% for
snacks
and 16% for dinner.Almost half (42%) of added
sugar
people in the USA get from
snacks
. The next biggest
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time is breakfast, with just below
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quarter. Dinner and lunch don't take a significant role, with 19% and 16%  respectively.
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coherence cohesion
Consider adding a clear introductory sentence to set the context for the reader.
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Avoid minor grammar mistakes and pay attention to your sentence structure for clearer ideas.
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Include relevant data from the charts to support your main points more effectively.
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You clearly identified the main features of the charts.
coherence cohesion
Good logical structure in presenting the data, making clear comparisons between the different nutrients.
coherence cohesion
Your essay effectively compares the nutrient consumption at different meal times.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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