The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate changes that happened in the Science and Technology Museum at 2 various times( 1996 and 2016).
Overall
, it was crucial that the vegetations were destroyed
while
the number of facilities increased over a period of 20 years.
According to
the pictures, at the start, the sector of the car park, in the east, was reduced and it was replaced by a Bicycle park and car park;
moreover
, the path was the same as before, but the trees that were in the nearby region climbed.
In addition
, the green district's area declined and they have built not only a VR room but
also
a Solar wind area. The graph demonstrates that the sector of the main place was the same as the prior;
however
, the figure for equipment rose owing to the fact that the writing desk, in the north, was altered by computers and the library;
furthermore
, the rooms that were in the east
such
as the library and the print room changed to 3D cinema and digital technology room;
additionally
, cafe alternative to the restaurant;
nevertheless
, the reception desk that was next to cafe became bigger.
Also
, steam and diesel engine exhibitions were near each other and steam had the same place as the previous, yet the diesel type was replaced by an electronic car.
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