task 1 the graph below shows the contribution of three sectors- agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services- to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

task 1

the graph below shows the contribution of three sectors- agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services- to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graph provides information about how agriculture, manufacturing, business and financial services sectors contributed to the UK economy in the 90s.
Overall
, it can be seen from the diagram that, agriculture’s contribution has decreased significantly over the century,
whereas
, business and financial services have become a larger part of the British economic system over the given years. In 1990, the agriculture section seemed to be more popular than the other two where it reached its peak in 1950 with a 50% contribution. But over the years it reduced
upto
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up to
5% drastically. Even though the manufacturing sector had the same trend, the involvement it had in the economy decreased at a lower rate where its portion
cut
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down in half from 45% to 20% during the provided time period.
Conversely
, businesses had a different trend than the other two, where it had a very minimal involvement in the early stages of the 90s and in the later stages, it
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the leading contributor to the
overall
British economic system with a 30% engagement. So, in conclusion, the diagram illustrates that business and finance services took the lead in the UK economy with a very high difference at the beginning of the new millennium.
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  • contribution
  • sector
  • economy
  • twentieth century
  • trend
  • decline
  • growth
  • period
  • significant rise
  • factors
  • relative performance
  • dominant
  • comparison
  • analysis
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