The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram represents the various factors that led people to move to
United
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the United
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Kingdom and out of it. four main factors have been included. At first glance, it can be seen that getting a
job
is the primary reason for individuals to emigrate and immigrate from
United
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the United
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Kingdom, as one-third of the population migrates
due to
finding a
job
. figures of movement after getting a definite
job
is
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are
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almost the same in both scenarios.
However
, about twice as
much
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many
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residents move away from
UK
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the UK
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in search
for
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of
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work as opposed to immigrating to
UK
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the UK
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looking for a
job
, which points
at
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to
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the low numbers of work opportunities present in
UK
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the UK
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. Another striking difference is
between
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apply
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the ratio of people migrating to pursue formal study, standing at 26% for immigration as opposed to a mere 4% for emigration which reflects
UK's
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the UK's
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high standards of education leading to many students immigrating for educational purposes.
Also
, a large chunk has not stated
reason
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the reason
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for
emmigration
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immigration
emigration
which can affect the findings and the resulting analysis.
overall
, it is visible that people travel
due to
different factors.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words job, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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