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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
men
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women
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 engaged in
further
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education
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 in Britain across three periods: 1970/71, 1980/81, and 1990/91.
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 data is categorized by full-time and part-time study. In 1970/71, part-time
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 was predominant among males, with approximately 1 million participants compared to just over 100,000 in full-time
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.
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 trend persisted over the years, with part-time
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 remaining more popular among
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, despite a slight decrease in numbers to about 900,000 by 1990/91. For females, part-time
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 prevailed, but with a significant increase over the years. In 1970/71, around 700,000
women
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 were enrolled in part-time study, rising to nearly 1.1 million by 1990/91. Full-time
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 for
women
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 began at around 100,000 in 1970/71 and experienced a gradual increase, reaching approximately 200,000 by 1990/91.
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,
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 and
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favored
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 part-time
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 throughout the periods, with a clear upward trend among females. The data indicates a growing preference for part-time study among
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,
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men
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 exhibited a slight decline in participation. Full-time
education
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 remained considerably less popular for both genders,
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 with modest growth.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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