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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below depicts the
unemployment
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rate
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 in Australia in 2012. In general, the results collected in rural
areas
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 are higher than in urban
areas
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. In the first
quarter
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 of the
year
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, the
unemployment
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rate
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 in rural
areas
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 is almost triple
of
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the
rate
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 in urban
areas
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, at around 6.5
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percent
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per cent
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 in the countryside and around 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in the cities. Eventually, moving to the second
quarter
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 of the
year
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, the
rate
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 in rural
areas
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experiences
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 a decrease from around 6.5
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percent
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per cent
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 to 5
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percent
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.
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, for the city
areas
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,
this
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 number has drastically increased from 2
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percent
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per cent
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 to 4
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percent
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. The lowest
rate
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 of
unemployment
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 collected in the countryside is
at
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approximately 4.5
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percent
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per cent
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, recorded
in
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between the second and third
quarter
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 of the
year
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. For the urban
areas
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,
this
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 number is at almost 2
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percent
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per cent
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, recorded in the third
quarter
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 of the
year
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. In conclusion, despite the
unemployment
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rate
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 in rural
areas
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 being higher than that in urban
areas
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, the
rate
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 in the countryside is gradually decreasing
while
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 the
rate
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 in the cities is increasing
overally
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overall
.
This
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 shows that people losing their jobs and
unable
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being unable
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 to get a new source of income in the city
areas
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 is becoming more common nowadays, compared to in the rural
areas
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate, areas, quarter, year, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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