You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The chart below depicts the
unemployment
rate
in Australia in 2012. In general, the results collected in rural
areas
are higher than in urban
areas
. In the first
quarter
of the
year
, the
unemployment
rate
in rural
areas
is almost triple
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the
rate
in urban
areas
, at around 6.5
percent
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in the countryside and around 2
percent
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per cent
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in the cities. Eventually, moving to the second
quarter
of the
year
, the
rate
in rural
areas
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a decrease from around 6.5
percent
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to 5
percent
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.
However
, for the city
areas
,
this
number has drastically increased from 2
percent
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to 4
percent
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. The lowest
rate
of
unemployment
collected in the countryside is
at
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approximately 4.5
percent
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, recorded
in
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between the second and third
quarter
of the
year
. For the urban
areas
,
this
number is at almost 2
percent
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, recorded in the third
quarter
of the
year
. In conclusion, despite the
unemployment
rate
in rural
areas
being higher than that in urban
areas
, the
rate
in the countryside is gradually decreasing
while
the
rate
in the cities is increasing
overally
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overall
.
This
shows that people losing their jobs and
unable
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to get a new source of income in the city
areas
is becoming more common nowadays, compared to in the rural
areas
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate, areas, quarter, year, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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