Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people thimk that,in today worldsubjects and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Being
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a teenagers
teenagers
is a controversial issue today. It is Fix the agreement mistake
teenager
very
different progress and when you grow up it will come with a wide variety Correct article usage
a very
changes
. Many people believe that it has some positive Change preposition
of changes
effects
being teenagers
while
many others think that it may have a few problems.
In the first place
the most important positive Add a comma
place,
effects
of being Fix the agreement mistake
effect
teenager
is Add an article
a teenager
that
being brave when you have to decide in Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
essential situations. Correct article usage
apply
Also
Add a comma
Also,
teenagers
area has
many important prefers Wrong verb form
have
such
as to choose
which university Change the verb form
choosing
you
will attend what kind of job Correct pronoun usage
they
you
want or living Correct pronoun usage
they
another
city that Change preposition
in another
you
have never lived Correct pronoun usage
they
before
. If you be brave you are going to do one's best. Change preposition
in before
Therefore
you will quickly improve yourself but sometimes you have to be careful because of lack
Correct article usage
a lack
of lack
knowledge of Remove the redundancy
apply
the
life.
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apply
Moreover
social life is an additional positive Add a comma
Moreover,
effects
of being Change the noun form
effect
Correct article usage
a teenagers
teenagers
. If you are young you have full of energy that you need Fix the agreement mistake
teenager
spend
. You can hang out with your friends frequently and you can join a lot of activities. Fix the infinitive
to spend
Besides
in the younger times of your Add a comma
Besides,
life
you have Add a comma
life,
less
responsibilities Change the quantifier
fewer
thus
you have mostly free time except
school and lessons.
Add the preposition
except for
However
being Add a comma
However,
teenagers
has some negative effects
also
. For
instance
it is a little bit Add a comma
instance,
diffucult
to keep up with your changing body day by day but you should in peace with your body whatever Correct your spelling
difficult
will happened
. Wrong verb form
happens
Furthermore
you might feel like Add a comma
Furthermore,
get
somewhere misunderstood and you may Change the verb form
getting
live
Verb problem
have
some
conflict with your parents because of the fact that there is a gap between generations.
Change preposition
in some
To sum up
everything into account being Correct article usage
a teenagers
teenagers
has both some negative and positive Fix the agreement mistake
teenager
effects
but it seems to me that positive
Correct article usage
the positive
effects
outweigh it's
negative Correct your spelling
its
effects
because in
the earlier time of our lives is better than getting older.Change preposition
apply
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
The introduction sets up the topic well and introduces both sides of the argument.
task achievement
You have identified both positive and negative aspects of being a teenager, showing a balanced view.
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