There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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At present,the pressure on youth rapidly increasing to
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in academic life. Because, some people argue that elective
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like physical
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and cookery, should not be included in the school syllabus so children are able to focus on academic
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statement because pupils have sufficient
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to work on academic
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and their
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for studies will be increased.
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will be provided more
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for academic
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focus on a specific subject matter rather than wasting
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on other elective
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like cookery and sports.
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, pupils are able to succeed in their academic life.
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, recent research concluded that the majority of
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than other activities.
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level of
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who concentrate on
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rather than
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activities. At present
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would prefer to attach to one specific matter than several things because the interest towards it is always high.
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fond of it and pay more attention to it.
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to successfully achieve their life goals.
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who learn both academic and non-academic
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towards
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is lower compared to a student who studies only academic
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the school syllabus will enable
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to utilize the
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for more academic
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and increase their
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of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pressure
  • succeed
  • academically
  • non-academic
  • physical education
  • cookery
  • school syllabus
  • concentrate
  • academic work
  • well-rounded
  • enhancement
  • practical skills
  • balanced education system
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