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The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period.

The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period.
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The given bar chart illustrates the number of
UK
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 and US
tourists
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 who
traveled
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 to each country between 2011 and 2015, over the period of 4 years.
In addition
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, the second bar graph shows the amount of expenditure each group of
tourists
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 spent during
this
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 same period. In general terms, it can be clearly seen that the figures for both countries’
tourists
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 fluctuated,
while
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 the amount of
tourists
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’ consumption constantly increased over the timescale. Turning to the first chart in more detail, the number of
UK
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travelers
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 in the US was higher than 3 million except for 2012 and 2013.
By contrast
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, the number of US
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 did not surpass 3 million until the end of the timeframe in 2014. In 2013, both figures reached a trough of 2.8 million each. Looking at the second graph, between 2011 and 2013,
UK
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tourists
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 in the US spent approximately 1
billion
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dollars
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 more than US
tourists
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 in the
UK
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. US visitors spent roughly 4
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dollars
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 in each of these years
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UK
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 visitors spent roughly 3
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dollars
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 per year. From 2014 to 2015, there was an ascent in the amount of
UK
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tourists
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’ spending reaching 6
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 compared to US
tourists
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’ spending figure of 4
billion
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dollars
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, tourists, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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