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The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period. Write at least 150 words.

The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart illustrates the number of
UK
 and US
tourists
 who
traveled
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 to each country between 2011 and 2015, over the period of 4 years.
In addition
, the second bar graph shows the amount of expenditure each group of
tourists
 spent during
this
 same period. In general terms, it can be clearly seen that the figures for both countries’
tourists
 fluctuated,
while
 the amount of
tourists
’ consumption constantly increased over the timescale. Turning to the first chart in more detail, the number of
UK
travelers
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 in the US was higher than 3 million except for 2012 and 2013.
By contrast
, the number of US
travelers
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 did not surpass 3 million until the end of the timeframe in 2014. In 2013, both figures reached a trough of 2.8 million each. Looking at the second graph, between 2011 and 2013,
UK
tourists
 in the US spent approximately 1
billion
dollars
 more than US
tourists
 in the
UK
. US visitors spent roughly 4
billion
dollars
 in each of these years
while
UK
 visitors spent roughly 3
billion
dollars
 per year. From 2014 to 2015, there was an ascent in the amount of
UK
tourists
’ spending reaching 6
billion
dollars
 in 2015 compared to US
tourists
’ spending figure of 4
billion
dollars
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, tourists, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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