The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart below illustrates New Zealand's inline shopping

sales

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for several

sectors

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in 2003 and 2013.

Overall

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, it is clearly seen that in New Zealands'online online shops in 2003, the film/music and books

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occupied only 40% of all

sales

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, in 2013 are occupied nearly 55% of all online shops. Getting back to the details, online

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for retail

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in 2003, the travel sector shared about 36 per cent of the market and had a leading position compared with other retail

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, in 2013, travel

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had slightly decreased to 7% and eventually, film/music trend

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had grown for 12% and take a lead in 2013.

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, in 2003, book vending was expanding by only 19% of all

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which was at the bottom of the

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between retail

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, after 10 years, the book

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index grew slightly and took nearly 22% of all market

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. Regarding the chart, 2003's clothes

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share was 24%.

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, in 10 years,

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number decreased by 8 per cent which is 16%

To sum up

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, most people used to buy travel goods in New Zealand in 2003, despite

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, in 2013, most people were buying film/music goods.

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The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Fewer and fewer people today right by hand using a pen pencil or brush. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or a negative development?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is often said that crime is one of the main things that make the quality of life poorer. Crime in developed countries is one of the biggest problems in society. What are the causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to reduce it?

It is thought by some that its is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside.

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.