The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart below illustrates New Zealand's inline shopping
sales
for several sectors
in 2003 and 2013. Overall
, it is clearly seen that in New Zealands'online online shops in 2003, the film/music and books sectors
occupied only 40% of all sales
. However
, in 2013 are occupied nearly 55% of all online shops.
Getting back to the details, online sales
for retail sectors
in 2003, the travel sector shared about 36 per cent of the market and had a leading position compared with other retail sectors
, in 2013, travel sales
had slightly decreased to 7% and eventually, film/music trend sales
had grown for 12% and take a lead in 2013. Moreover
, in 2003, book vending was expanding by only 19% of all sales
which was at the bottom of the sales
between retail sectors
. Furthermore
, after 10 years, the book sales
index grew slightly and took nearly 22% of all market sales
.
Regarding the chart, 2003's clothes sales
share was 24%. Nevertheless
, in 10 years, this
number decreased by 8 per cent which is 16%
To sum up
, most people used to buy travel goods in New Zealand in 2003, despite this
, in 2013, most people were buying film/music goods.Submitted by berlinastanalll on
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