The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts

illustrates

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the information that retail sector's online

sales

in New Zealand

such

travel

, film, books and clothes in various two

perios

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periods

period

2003

amd

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and

2013

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Units are measured by percentage.

Overall

, it can be seen that

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travel

and

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film and music online shopping

sales

were

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the highest

sales

ratio. In detail,

travel

online shopping

sales

was

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the highest

sales

than books in 2003, at 36% and just below a fifth respectively, but

travel

decreased by 7 per cent and books

sales

increased by 4% in 2013.

Furthermore

, films and music's online

sales

had just above a fifth in 2003 but it increased significantly in 2013, which is a third and it was the highest

sales

in 2013 than other products.

In contrast

, clothing

sales

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decreased as compared to the previous period, just below a quarter in 2003 but it decreased by 8 per cent in 2013.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

150 words

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The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people argue that modern technologies such as computers and cellphones destroy people’ social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centers. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?

Some say thatr advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Anybody can use a mobile phone to answer work and personal calls at any time or 7 days a week. Does this development have more positive or negative effects on individuals and society?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.