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Some think that societies should take action to fight climate change, while others believe it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some argue that societies should be the ones fighting
climate
change
. Others suggest that a better approach to tackle
climate
change
 is to adjust to it.
While
 adjusting to
climate
change
 helps people prepare for any disasters, I believe that societies should fight
climate
change
 because
its
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it is
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 a threat to humanity. Adapting to the effects of changing climatic conditions ensures that people are able to predict the effects of these changes and
accordingly
 prepare for
it
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them
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.
This
 involves building flood defences, improving drainage
system
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systems
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, and designing buildings to withstand extreme weather conditions.
For example
, increasingly more real estate companies are building large complexes and tall apartments in
earthquake prone
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earthquake-prone
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 areas of India, with robust materials so that in case of any seismic activity buildings do not fall like they used to
couple
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a couple
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 of years back.
However
, my opinion is that it is better to fight the root of the problem
instead
 of simply adapting to it. The effect of
climate
change
posseses
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poses
 a
signficant
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significant
 threat to humans' life on the planet. Governments and regulatory authorities across all
the
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countries should take
necessary
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the necessary
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 steps to fight
this
 on a global scale.
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task response
Your essay should clearly present both perspectives, giving each viewpoint a balanced discussion before presenting your own opinion. You can strengthen your task achievement by elaborating more on how societies can and should fight climate change, potentially providing more concrete examples and data.
coherence and cohesion
Work on ensuring a smooth flow between your ideas. Transition phrases can help link your ideas more naturally, making your argument easier to follow. Additionally, a clear conclusion that summarizes the points discussed and restates your opinion would make your essay more cohesive.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay does a good job of introducing the two conflicting viewpoints on climate change.
supported main points
You provide a relevant example of real estate practices in earthquake-prone areas, which supports your point about adaptation to climate change.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • emissions reduction
  • environmental policies
  • sustainable practices
  • reforestation
  • public awareness
  • adaptation
  • infrastructure
  • extreme weather
  • drought-resistant crops
  • economic impacts
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