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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the inforamtion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the inforamtion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the amount of
price
 variation of three different materials in each month during 2014.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 nickel
price
 has more changing over
months
Correct article usage
the months
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 shown,
while
 the
price
 of copper had a
limitation
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limited
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 range of variation. All three materials had stable
price
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
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during
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from
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 July till September. In January, the
price
 of nickel was
in
Change preposition
at
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higher
Correct article usage
a higher
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 level, but it collapsed dramatically to a minimum point in June .After that, it increased slowly until the end of
period
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the period
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 and
touch
Wrong verb form
touched
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the
Correct article usage
a
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price
 about 5% lower than the
price
 at the beginning of the year. The
price
 of Copper and zinc started lower than nickel at the beginning of the year. Both of them had a fluctuating trend. Zinc experienced the highest
price
 in February with 2% growth
compare
Change the form of the verb
compared
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 with the beginning
price
 ,
however
at the end
 of the period its
price
 was 1% more than the first
ones
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one
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.
In contrast
,
Copper
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the Copper
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price
was
Verb problem
showed
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 a downward trend till May and June and after that grew gently and
became
Verb problem
apply
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finally
 0.5% lower than the beginning
price
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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