The first diagram shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time

The first diagram shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time
The provided line graph
show
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the
number
of individuals who used
train
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trains
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over
decade
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a decade
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from 2000 to 2009, whilst another line graph depicts
percentage
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the percentage
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of
trains
running on
time
compared with the target. The units are measured in
billion
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billions
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and in
tge
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the
percentage
of
trains
. Generally speaking, it is evident that the
number
of
trains
slightly rose,
while
the
percentage
of
trains
running on
time
in
comparispn
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comparison
with
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standart
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standard
fluctuated over
given
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a given
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period of
time
. First and foremost, it is evident that the
percentage
of
trains
running on
time
in comparison with
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the standart
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standart
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standard
line comprised 92% in 2000,
reamained
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remained
steady from 2003 to 2004 and faced an overwhelming reduction from 96% to 92% in 2006.
However
, after a decade it doubled to 93%.
Furthermore
,
it
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in
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2007 the
percentage
of
trains
that
runned
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ran
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on
time
culminated at 97% and plateaued during
next
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the next
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two
given
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years. With regards to the
number
of
passangers
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passengers
of
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on
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train
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trains
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in 2000 it is noticeable that it comprised nearly 38
billion
.
Moreover
, in 2002 it significantly skyrocketed to approximately 42
billion
of
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passengers.
However
, notwithstanding of aforementioned changes, just after
year
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a year
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it took a nosedive
at
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38
billion
of
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pounds.In 2005 it touched the apex with 50
billion
of
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pounds and hit
the
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rock bottom at 40
billion
of
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pounds.
Additionally
, the
number
of train passengers touched
it
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its
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highest point at 42
billion
of
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passengers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, percentage, trains, time, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.

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