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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2012 with the predictions for 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts show six categories of
energy
capacity
 in
gigawats
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gigawatts
gigawatt
 in 2012 and in 2030.
Overall
, fossil fuels, renewables and nuclear will decrease
while
 other
energy
 capacities
such
 as wind, solar and flexibility
capacity
 will increase.
According to
 the first pie
chart
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chart,
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 the highest
percent point
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percentage
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 of fossil fuels was 64%,
renewables
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and renewables
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 had almost
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a quater
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quater
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quarter
 of all
energy
capacity
.
Moreover
, wind and nuclear had particularly the same percentages 5% and 6% respectively.
Other
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The other
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 2 categories: solar and flexibility
capacity
was
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were
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 allocated
on
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at
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 2% and 1%. In 2030,
by
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scientists
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prediction,
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prediction
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predict
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 the situation will change. Fossil fuels will stay a leader with 44%. Solar
willl
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will
 have a significant increase from 2% to 18%,
also
 wind will increase too from 5% to 12%,
while
 renewables will lose 3
percent
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per cent
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 points. Flexible
capacity
 will show
a
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apply
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stability without significant changes, the same situation with nuclear. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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half of all categories will be changed
on
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by
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 no more than 3%,
while
 other
energy
 capacities will
hace
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have
a significant changes
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significant changes
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 both positively and negatively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, capacity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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