The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in liters in selected countries for the period 1960-2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given two line graphs depict the percentage of smokers and the intake of alcohol in

liters

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in the 3 different countries in the period of 40 years from 1960 to 2000.

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, in all 3 countries, smokers reduced and the consumption of alcohol serged in the time span of 40 years starting from 1960.

To begin

with, in both Japan and the Netherlands, the number of individuals who smoked dropped with time with nearly 49% and 40% being in 1960 and around 38% and 20% being in 2000 respectively. The USA stayed steady at nearly 59% from 1960 to 1970

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, it suddenly fell to 45% and

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gradually decreased and became nearly 38% in 2000. Alcohol usage in

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per person in Turkey and The USA was almost the same in 1960 and 2000 with 8% and 1% with a slight rise in 1980 whilst, in Holland, it rose significantly from nearly 4% to 11% from 1960 to 1980

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, it gradually decreased and changed to 10% in 2000.

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