These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

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leave their
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homes to work abroad and some of them
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their families with them. Do you think the benefits of it outweigh
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the disadvantages
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in terms of family development? In
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both
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of view and compare them. Leaving your
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homes
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means a lot of changes, you will be in a different spot of the world you
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know a thing about it . And it will take a long time to be used to for both the older and younger
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. Some
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prefer to take their families with them
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because
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see it
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a perfect opportunity for their
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future. In
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be form the benefits because
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is more Sophisticated than
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own country .
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The nature
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effect
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them in a bad or a good way so if
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the
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are used to
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live
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in a place that
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lack
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of
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nuture maby
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nature maybe
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the
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will like the new place , but if they
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to a country that
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like a desert they will face some difficulties. If we want to see the other point
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that
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homesick can play an important part
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the health of the person .
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the family
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don't
get used to
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new lifestyle . And face a problem with the communication with the
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because they speak the same language. So if that person
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to take his family
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he must make sure of the age of his children.
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Some reasoning is given for why people might see moving abroad with their families as beneficial.

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