The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in the US from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in the US from 1983 to 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts compare the percentage change of some
energy
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categories between 1983 and 2003 in the US.
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, it is evident that oil and coal showed a decreasing rate shift,
whereas
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the amount of nuclear power and natural gas significantly increased. Meanwhile, the proportion of
hydropower
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energy
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remained unchanged
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two decades. In 1983,
hydropower
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production had the largest proportion amongst other powers, amounting to 47% of
total
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the total
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. Coal followed in the next position, it contributed 23% of total
energy
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,
then
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nuclear power produced showed
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a similarly
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similarly
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rate at 20%.
While
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natural gas contribution was 11% of total
energy
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,
hydropower
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was only 4%, making it the least
energy
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produced in that year. By 2003, the contribution of
hydropower
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fell to 38%,
however
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, it maintained its dominant position. Coal production
also
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significantly dropped to 13%.
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, the production of nuclear power surged to 24%, replacing coal's position. Natural gas exhibited a sharp increasing proportion to 21% of total
energy
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. Meanwhile,
hydropower
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contibuted
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contributed
stable at 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, hydropower with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy production
  • proportions
  • significance
  • notable increases
  • decreases
  • consistencies
  • emphasize
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • trends
  • emerging patterns
  • shifts
  • decline
  • rise
  • percentage
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • comparative analysis
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