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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the proportion of
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people
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 giving money to charity in 1990 and in 2010, comparing 5 groups divided in different age ranges. In 1990 the 36-50 is the most generous with an astonishing 42% of
people
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 donating!
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 in 2010
people
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 of the same age weren't so charitable and
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the percentage
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 dropped to 35% which was still the second highest of that year equally with the over 65. In 2010
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51-65, with an almost 40%, a big improvement compared to the 35%
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 1990. The least kind one has been both in the years 1990 and 2010 the 18-25 years old. They
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started
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 with a decent percentage of roughly 17% in 1990, to a terrible drop of 10% arriving at 7% in 2010.
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 pattern was common in
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20 years
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20-year
 period. In fact, three groups out of five showed a drop in the
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proportion
 of
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 donating. It
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 can be seen that the older the
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 get the more generous they are, as we can see from the
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 two groups improvement.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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