The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the distribution of British people spending
money
on
charity
by
age
range
for the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, the highest
proportion
of
age
range
was 36-50 in 1990, it was 51-65 in 2010. It can be seen that the lowest percentage of
charity
spending was the young generation whose
age
between 18 and 25, for both
year
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.
To begin
with
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the year 1990, when
age
were
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was
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getting older until the
age
of 50, individuals giving
money
to
charity
increased. After the
age
of 50, the
proportion
of British
poeple
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people
who spend
money
to
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charity
decreased. For the year 2010, the distribution of individuals went up from the youngest
age
range
to the
range
of 51-65;
however
, the
proportion
slightly decreased for
elderly
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the elderly
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. It can be observed that in
initial
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three
age
group
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groups
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which are, 18-25, 26-35 and 36-50 respectively, the
proportion
rate has
been
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decreased in two
decade
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decades
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.
On the other hand
, in 2010, elderly people
tend
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tended
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to give more
money
to
charties
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charities
than in 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, charity, age, range, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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