Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People

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can be split

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two

gropus

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groups

. Some tend to have a job in the same place all their life, others prefer to change often. Having a

carreer

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career

for the same company lots of time has its advantages.

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, having a marriage and kids is easier staying in the same city for a certain period.

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, you have more possibilities to know

people

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better and create bonds to make some life-long friendships.

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realationship

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relationship

relationships

with your coworkers

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be all fun and games.

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, my father's boss didn't treat him and his colleagues well, leading to years of agony in the workplace

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him to leave. Working in different locations,

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has its pros and cons. First of

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it expands your horizons moving,

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, abroad or in different cities. There you can meet tons of

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and understand new

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cultures

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not very social

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can find it difficult to adapt to a new place and create

connetions

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connections

with other

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easily. In conclusion, I believe that balance should be in

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lives and both experiences should be done

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in a lifetime. I think is better to move around

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being younger

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you have lots of energy to enrich your

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cultural

background and learn new skills. Afterwards, when getting older stabilize in a spot you are comfortable with to

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roots and raise a family.

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task achievement

Try to present a more structured introduction stating clearly that you will discuss both views before giving your own opinion.

task achievement

Add a few more examples to support your arguments. For instance, include an example of someone who has benefited from working in the same organization their whole life.

coherence cohesion

Create clearer topic sentences for paragraphs to guide the reader on what each paragraph will discuss.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical flow by using more cohesive devices like 'on one hand/on the other hand,' 'furthermore,' and 'in contrast'.

coherence cohesion

Pay attention to small spelling and grammar mistakes as they can slightly affect the clarity of your essay (e.g., 'carreer' should be 'career,' 'coltures' should be 'cultures').

task achievement

You have presented both sides of the argument and provided examples to support your points.

task achievement

Your conclusion gives a balanced view and a personal opinion, which is good for task achievement.

coherence cohesion

Your reasoning is clear and logically sound.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

5.5

Logical structure

6.5

Introduction & conclusion present

6.5

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

6.5

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

237 words

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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

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