You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs illustrate the percentage of female individuals, who graduated
from
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higher degrees, in five different
countries
(the UK, the USA,
Australia
, South Korea, and France) between the
years
1980 and 2015.
Overall
, in
Australia
, the percentage of
women
who went into higher education remained the same with almost 60% in both
years
. Except for
Australia
, the ratio of graduated females increased in
other
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the other
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four
countries
in 35
years
. Despite
of
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that
increasing
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, the
percentages
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percentage
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of graduated
women
for
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all
countries
were
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was
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still under 60% in 2015. In 1980, the ratio of female individuals, who went to college, was 50% in France
in
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1980. The amount of studying
women
of
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theUSA
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the USA
and the UK followed with almost 40% and 35% respectively. In 2015, the USA reached almost 60% graduated
women
as same as
Australia
while
the UK and France had around 55% of female college students.
On the other hand
, South Korea had the
least
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lowest
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percentage of
women
went
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who went
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into higher education for both
years
. It had only 15% of females who went to college in 1980. Even
thought
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though
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it doubled to 30% in 2015, it still was almost half of
other
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the other
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countries
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, australia, years, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • higher education
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • significant
  • comparison
  • identify
  • highest
  • lowest
  • contextual
  • global
  • relevant
  • constant
  • substantial
  • fluctuation
  • proportional
  • data
  • evaluate
  • analyze
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