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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph
illustates
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illustrates
 the manufacturing
rated
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rate
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 of the leading fuel resources in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, the level of petroleum fluctuated
in
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over
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 19 years but ended up growing.
While
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 natural gas ratings increased each
year
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, with minor exceptions, coal energy
units number
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unit numbers
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 actually lowered during that time. First of all, in 1981, petroleum levels were pretty high and
it
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they
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 kept increasing until the
year
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of
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apply
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1987. That's when the graph for petrol started
deacreasing
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decreasing
, but eventually, it showed
the
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continuous growth since 1990.
However
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, the same could not be
told
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 about coal unit numbers. It faced an incredible loss of over 40 energy units in 1984. Even though
,
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 carbon ratings showed some growth after that, it was still the least
producted
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produced
 fuel source after nearly 2 decades.
Lastly
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 other materials displayed some fluctuations in their energy amounts,
natural
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and natural
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 gas kept on skyrocketing. Till the
year
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of
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apply
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1990, the graph was kind of straight,
however
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 after that exact
year
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, it grew up to the number 2.5 times higher than its first state.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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