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Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

#emphasis #tests #examinations #restriction #teachers #pressure #learners
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There is no doubt, that getting new
knowlege
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knowledge
 is crucial;
howevere
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however
,
people
 argue about the necessity of preparation for
tests
. I suggest, that testing
people
has
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positeve
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positive
outcoms
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outcomes
outcome
, which will be described in the essay.
To begin
 with, the argument for
such
 kind of
assesment
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assessment
 is
tests
 make the process of
chosing
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choosing
 students easier.
This
 is because
,
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apply
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 a lot of
people
 want to
achieve
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fill
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few
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a few
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 vacant seats in
the
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respectful universities;
commisions
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commissions
 have to select candidates with
fewer efforts
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less effort
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 and exams help to evaluate potential students.
For instance
,
in
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last
 year Harvard Business School had 400
aplicants
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applicants
on
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for
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MBA
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the MBA
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 program, but the number of available positions was only 30, so the result in the GMAT test worked as
a
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assesment
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assessment
 of candidates.
In contrast
, the absence of
such
 types of
controll
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control
 may lead to corruption or difficulties in
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the selection
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 of potential beneficiaries.
In addition
, the idea, that exams
migh
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might
 motivate
people
 to study more, will be considered as another positive influence of
tests
.
In other words
, some
people
 believe in
existing
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the solid links between hard
studing
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studying
,
successful
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successfully
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 passing exams and finding
good
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a good
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 job, which
stimulate
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 them to
prepair
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prepare
repair
 harder.
For example
, In order to get
job
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a job
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 in
the
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an
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 international company, I have been learning how I can pass
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the IELTS
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 exam for 3 years.
In contrast
, If individuals have no need to pass
tests
, they will spend less time on getting new
knowlege
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knowledge
. In conclusion, I would stick to my opinion, that the mentioned above ways of
controll
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control
controlling
 knowledge are pivotal because,
firstly
, it allows to make
efficient
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an efficient
the efficient
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 selection of candidates for vacant jobs or for a grant in a University and,
secondly
, it
increase
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overall
 time
spending
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spent
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 on
studing
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studying
.
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language accuracy
Work on improving your language accuracy. There are several spelling and grammatical errors that need attention, such as 'knowlege' instead of 'knowledge,' 'posive outcoms' instead of 'positive outcomes,' and 'assesment' instead of 'assessment'.
detail development
Expand on your main ideas and examples a bit more to provide deeper insight. This would enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.
cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. This can be done by using more linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
introduction strength
Your introduction clearly states your viewpoint, which sets a strong foundation for your essay.
example use
You have effectively used specific examples to support your arguments, which helps in making your points more relatable and concrete.
conclusion strength
The conclusion effectively summarizes your arguments and reinforces your viewpoint.
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