You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep? Give reasons for your answer

There is no denying the fact that having
sufficient
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amount
of sleep is crucial for
body
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the body
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and mental health.
As a
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recent study
that
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indicates a profound
relation
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between having
a
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diabetes with inadequate sleep
time
.
This
essay will discuss what
can
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lack of sleep causes and what is the most applicable approaches to cut
of
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the consequences of the issue. To
beging
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begin
with, there are many risks of being late
night
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late-night
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lover and having
a
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little
time
to sleep which could directly
affecting
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human beings.
Firstly
, it leads to uncountable
difficulities
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difficulties
and problems.
in other words
, the
overall
individual's health would be suffering coincided with less
time
of sleep where the functionality of
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the human's
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human's
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brain would not
processing
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properly.
In addition
, having unsustainable psychological status
who
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people might
encountered
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due to
irregular recovery
time
which is
the
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a
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significant advantage of sleeping well. In terms of potential solutions,
consider
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having a healthy diet
and
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maintaining fasting and Acquiring
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle is a vital approach to gradually tackle
this
issue
.
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It is
also
possible to say that
habbit
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habit
rabbit
out
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of consuming fast food and high
amount
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of sugar in daily meals would
enormusely
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enormously
assist in
sleeping related
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issues.
For instance
, people who are foody and
addective
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addicted
to highly contaminated meals ( full of salt and sugar
ingridents
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ingredients
) might increase the
possibilty
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possibility
of having a heart attack because they consumed
unattainable
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an unattainable
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amount
of harmful minerals. In conclusion, there are many issues related to not sleeping well. it is
also
true that
with
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being on a healthy lifestyle and
and
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eating
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a resonable
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resonable
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reasonable
amount
of food we could
increamentally
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incrementally
overcome
this
problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sleep deprivation
  • cognitive functions
  • immune system
  • mood swings
  • work performance
  • productivity
  • absenteeism
  • accidents
  • sleep hygiene
  • restful sleeping environment
  • relaxation techniques
  • meditation
  • deep breathing exercises
  • yoga
  • sleep disorders
  • insomnia
  • sleep apnea
  • physical activity
  • balanced diet
  • caffeine
  • alcohol
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