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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above displays the variation in levels of
post-school
Use synonyms
 degrees in Australia and the number of
men
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 and women who held them in 1999 . On the whole , the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 was the most held
degree
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 among
men
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 , unlike women who presented the lowest percentage. On the one hand ,70% of females noticeably selected an Undergraduate
Diploma
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 in their
post-school
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 pathway.
While
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 few of them chose the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 by only 10% . Bachelor's
degree
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 and Masters's
degree
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 were picked by 50% and 40% respectively . 30% of females decided to hold a postgraduate
Diploma
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 .
On the other hand
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 , 90% of
men
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 chose the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 as their next step in
post-school
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 qualification , followed by a Postgraduate
Diploma
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 with 70% of the
overall
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 percentage.
Then
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 ,
men
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 who preferred a Masters
Degree
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 demonstrated 60% . next , those who decided to hold a Bachelor's
degree
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 showed almost 45% of the total .
While
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 Undergraduate
Diploma
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 holders displayed the lowest figure by only 35% .
To conclude
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 , a variability in
post-school
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 qualifications in Australia in 1999 was seen between
men
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 and women .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words post-school, men, diploma, degree with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • post-school qualifications
  • gender disparity
  • representation
  • overshadow
  • notable
  • predominantly
  • overall trend
  • significant
  • minimal gap
  • participation
  • comparison
  • qualification levels
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