You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The chart above displays the variation in levels of
post-school
degrees in Australia and the number of
men
and women who held them in 1999 . On the whole , the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
was the most held
degree
among
men
, unlike women who presented the lowest percentage. On the one hand ,70% of females noticeably selected an Undergraduate
Diploma
in their
post-school
pathway.
While
few of them chose the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
by only 10% . Bachelor's
degree
and Masters's
degree
were picked by 50% and 40% respectively . 30% of females decided to hold a postgraduate
Diploma
.
On the other hand
, 90% of
men
chose the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
as their next step in
post-school
qualification , followed by a Postgraduate
Diploma
with 70% of the
overall
percentage.
Then
,
men
who preferred a Masters
Degree
demonstrated 60% . next , those who decided to hold a Bachelor's
degree
showed almost 45% of the total .
While
Undergraduate
Diploma
holders displayed the lowest figure by only 35% .
To conclude
, a variability in
post-school
qualifications in Australia in 1999 was seen between
men
and women .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words post-school, men, diploma, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • post-school qualifications
  • gender disparity
  • representation
  • overshadow
  • notable
  • predominantly
  • overall trend
  • significant
  • minimal gap
  • participation
  • comparison
  • qualification levels
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