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The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words.

The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates how many
house
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houses
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 were owned and rented by
households
 in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall
, the percentage of
households
 in owned
accommodation
 was downward trend,
while
 the percentage of
households
 in rented
accommodation
 was upward trend.
Furthermore
 , the proportion of
households
 in rented
house
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houses
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 was
greatest
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the greatest
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. In terms of
owrning
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owning
working
accommodation
, in 1918, the proportion of
household
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households
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 was around 21%, which was the lowest, and
then
 increased dramatically to nearly 70% before dropping to about 62% in 2011. The percentage of
households
 in rented
accommodation
 was the highest in
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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