The chart below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided graph depicts the various
rate
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rates
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of individuals who
are
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were
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unemployed in several countries in 2005.
Overall
, the graph evaluates two main criteria, the
unemployment
rate
on the scale of adolescents from 15 to 24 years old and the
overall
, which
is occupy
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the largest part in Poland and estimated the smallest percentage of that in Denmark. It can be clearly seen that the number of young
people
who are unemploy was counted as an enormous
rate
, more than 35%, which occupied approximately 15% of the total
unemployment
in Poland. The second largest
rate
of young
people
who are unemploy belongs to Italy with around 22% and 7% when compared with that in total
unemployment
in 2005. In Hungary, there were 17% of unemployed young
people
in 2005, 6% of that total
rate
of unemployed
people
. There was a remarkable percentage of adolescents unemployed in Germany almost 15% and it is 10% when compared with all kinds of
unemployment
in the country. Denmark was the country having the lowest percentage of young
people
who were
unemploy
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unemployed
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in 2005 with just over 6%, and it was 3% in total
unemployment
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, unemployment, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • youth unemployment
  • overall unemployment
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • aged between
  • economic conditions
  • educational system
  • vocational training
  • long-term impacts
  • policy changes
  • job training programs
  • disparity
  • national unemployment rates
  • European countries
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