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The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagram
illustates
Correct your spelling
illustrates
 how a
sheep
 is cloned. In a big picture, the process requires 3
sheep
 to be involved.
Initially
, two female
sheep
, A and B were brought to the
expirement
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experiment
 base where different components were collected respectively. A DNA was extracted from a body
cell
, which
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 taken from the body of
sheep
 A. Meanwhile, an egg
cell
, which was originally from
sheep
 B, was collected with its nucleus removed for the cloning project onwards. After the components were extracted from the two
sheep
, the Egg
cell
 and DNA collected were fused between each other, allowing the fused
cell
 to multiply and
became
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become
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 an embryo which is
then
 relocated
in
Change preposition
to
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 the uterus of
sheep
 C, the foster mother. If processes were completed smoothly, a new lamb, which is a clone of
sheep
 A,
will
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would
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 be born after a few months.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sheep, cell with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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