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The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The flow diagram illustrates the cloning process of
sheep
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 to give
a
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apply
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birth
new
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to new
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sheep
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wihtout
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without
 male
sheep
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 involved. In brief, by combining a part of
egg
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cells
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 and body
cells
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 from different
sheeps
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sheep
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, the process will produce an embryo which is placed into
uterus
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the uterus
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, before it grows into a new cloned
sheep
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. First of all, there are two different
cells
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 that should be taken from
sheeps
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sheep
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,
such
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 as body
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cell
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cells
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 and
egg
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cell
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cells
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. As the illustration
shown
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,
body
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a body
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cell
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 is taken from
Sheep
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 A to extract the
DNA
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. Meanwhile,
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egg
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the egg
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cell
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 is picked up from
Sheep
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 B and removes its nucleus. After extracted
DNA
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 and
egg
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cells
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 without
nucleus
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a nucleus
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 are obtained, the extracted
DNA
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 is merged with the
egg
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cells
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. Afterwards,
this
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 combined
cell
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 will develop into
embryo
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an embryo
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 which is ready to be placed in
uterus
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the uterus
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. The embryo will develop into a cloned
sheep
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 of
Sheep
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 A because it has
same
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the same
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DNA
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with
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as
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Sheep
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 A.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sheep, egg, cells, cell, dna with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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