The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkwort and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two diagrams illustrate the silkworm's life stages and the step-by-step of

silk

cloth production.

Overall

, there are four stages of

silkworm's

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the silkworm's

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life cycle, starting with egg production and ending with

moth

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a moth

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born from

cocoon

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the cocoon

a cocoon

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. Meanwhile,

silk

cloth making consists of five steps, beginning with

silk

thread selection and

put

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putting

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the result into dye fluid.

First,

silkworm

egg

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eggs

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produced in nature gathered in one group.

While

the egg transforms

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into

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a larva after ten days, it consumes mulberry leaf as its diet in the next stage.

Furthermore

, it takes four to six weeks for the larva to produce

silk

thread around its body. After 3-8 days,

larva

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the larva

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will covered in

cocoon

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a cocoon

the cocoon

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and after

that

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that,

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it will change form to a moth before producing eggs

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the first stage. Moving to the process of producing

silk

garment

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garments

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initially

silk

threads are shorted out before boiling them in a big pan of water. After

boiled

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boiling

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, the threads are unrolled so that the length can be measured, amounting to around 300-900 meters.

Then

, the

unwind

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threads are twisted before dying

them

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apply

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into a big pan of dying solution.

Furthermore

, the twisted thread

are

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weaved and re-dyed to the dying fluid.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words silk with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

197 words

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