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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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A glance at the given table and chart depicts valuable data about
a
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the
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 distribution of
water
using
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use
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 in the
differnt
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different
 sectors
in
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of
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 the world.
In addition
, in the provided table,
water
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the water
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 consumption of Brazil and
Congo
 in 2000 is compared.
Overall
, agriculture had the biggest proportion
in
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of
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the
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apply
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water
usage
 from 1900 to 2000.
Moreover
, domestic
works
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work
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 is the third factor in
term
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terms
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 of
water
usage
 in the period shown. Brazil's total
water
 consumption was clearly more than
Congo
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Congo's
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.
Although
 all of the mentioned sectors in the chart have a similar trend and dramatically increased with the passage of time, individuals utilize a staggering 3000 km^3
water
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of water
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 yearly.
In contrast
, the lowest
water
usage
was occurred
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occurred
has occurred
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 in the domestic
usage
. It is evident from the prepared table that Braze had more population in 2000 in comparison with
Congo
.
Furthermore
, Brazilian people had 26,500 km^2
irrigated
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of irrigated
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 land
that
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which
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 is over two-hundredfold of
Congo
's irrigated land.
Hence
, obviously,
water
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the water
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 consumption of Brazilian per person was higher than the highlighted statistic in
Congo
 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, congo, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • distribution
  • agriculture
  • industry
  • domestic
  • sector
  • trends
  • discrepancies
  • sustainability
  • resource management
  • environmental impact
  • efficient
  • scarce
  • irrigation
  • desalination
  • sanitation
  • water-intensive
  • renewable resource
  • per capita
  • infrastructure
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