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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates estimated world illiteracy scales by six regions around the world and by male and female in the
last
 year.
Overall
 ,
it is clear that
 the
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
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 of South
Asia
 topped the estimated world illiteracy. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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seen
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is seen
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 in the chart
that
Correct word choice
apply
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of
Change preposition
apply
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females
 number more than
males
 in all regions.
While
 the developed countries were
lowest
Change the article
the lowest
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 amount in the chart.
Last
 year in South
Asia
 more than 55
females
 were illiterate,
while
 the male was only about 34.
However
, in the Arab States, the number of people who are not educated well was less than the topped one
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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nearly 52 for women,
males
 less than 30. For sub-Saharan African
females
 around 48 and 31
males
 . East
Asia
 and Latin America/ Caribbean were close to
other
Correct determiner usage
each other
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 it 9,10 of illiterate
males
 respectively.
while
females
 in East
Asia
 are more than Latin. In
contrest
Correct your spelling
contrast
, the developed countries had the lowest number for both genders.
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