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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates estimated world illiteracy scales by six regions around the world and by male and female in the
last
 year.
Overall
 ,
it is clear that
 the
female
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females
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 of South
Asia
 topped the estimated world illiteracy. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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seen
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is seen
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 in the chart
that
Correct word choice
apply
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of
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apply
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females
 number more than
males
 in all regions.
While
 the developed countries were
lowest
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the lowest
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 amount in the chart.
Last
 year in South
Asia
 more than 55
females
 were illiterate,
while
 the male was only about 34.
However
, in the Arab States, the number of people who are not educated well was less than the topped one
it
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apply
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nearly 52 for women,
males
 less than 30. For sub-Saharan African
females
 around 48 and 31
males
 . East
Asia
 and Latin America/ Caribbean were close to
other
Correct determiner usage
each other
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 it 9,10 of illiterate
males
 respectively.
while
females
 in East
Asia
 are more than Latin. In
contrest
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contrast
, the developed countries had the lowest number for both genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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