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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie diagram above
display
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 the electric production
units
 in
Australia
 and
france
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France
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 by fuel source during 20 years period. 
Overall
, it is clear both nations
has
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have
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 changed the
producation
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production
 elements over the 20 years time. And stopped
use
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using
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 some of them. Looking at the
informations
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information
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 in more detail. In 1980 the most common fuel used by both countries was coal.
The half
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 of production in
australia
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Australia
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 was by coal. And it was
quarter
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a quarter
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 in
france
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France
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. The other quarter in
france
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France
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 was natural gas.
While
asturalia
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Australia
 used 20
units
 of it.
Also
france
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France
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prduced
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produced
 20
units
 of oil. Unlike
australia
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Australia
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 they only used 10
units
 of oil.
However
,
australia
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Australia
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 used
hydro
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hydropower
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power
by
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20
units
.
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of.
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Meanwhile
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france
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France
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 only produced 5
units
 of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
.
Moreover
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 nuclear
power
only
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prduced
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produced
 in
france
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France
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.
In
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 the other hand, in 2000 more
thsn
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than
then
 75% of
Australia
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Australia's
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 Production was by coal.
In addition
, 36
units
 of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
.
In contrast
,
france
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France
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prduction
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production
 of
the
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apply
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natural gas
has
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increased significantly in 2000 with nearly 70% of the total
prudction
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production
. Oil and coal were at 25
units
for
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apply
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each.
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