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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie diagram above
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 the electric production
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 in
Australia
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 and
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france
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 by fuel source during 20 years period. 
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, it is clear both nations
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 changed the
producation
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production
 elements over the 20 years time. And stopped
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 some of them. Looking at the
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 in more detail. In 1980 the most common fuel used by both countries was coal.
The half
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 of production in
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australia
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 was by coal. And it was
quarter
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 in
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france
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. The other quarter in
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france
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 was natural gas.
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asturalia
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Australia
 used 20
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 of it.
Also
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france
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prduced
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produced
 20
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 of oil. Unlike
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australia
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 they only used 10
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 of oil.
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,
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australia
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 used
hydro
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power
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by
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20
units
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.
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france
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 only produced 5
units
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 of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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.
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power
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prduced
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produced
 in
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france
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.
In
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 the other hand, in 2000 more
thsn
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then
 75% of
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Australia
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Australia's
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 Production was by coal.
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, 36
units
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 of
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power
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.
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,
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france
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France
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prduction
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production
 of
the
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natural gas
has
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increased significantly in 2000 with nearly 70% of the total
prudction
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production
. Oil and coal were at 25
units
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for
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each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, australia, france, power with synonyms.
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