some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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and forecast to
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method
for those who are
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learning
. An argument in favour of
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students
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make
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evaluations
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aim is to get
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alone .
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exams easily without any hesitations.
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due to
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study
plan.
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helps to concentrate more effectively.
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students
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distract their
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concentration
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detrimentally their
studies
.
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, some of others who say ,
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me say that
group
study
would be a better option to
study
. An argument in favour of
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study
is that which gives
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students
to know their
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and
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weaknesses
due to
comparing others. To illustrate, when
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together , they easily solve their
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related to subjects .
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to solve
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peers
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in maths can help
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resolve that.
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when they are doing that help to improve their
studies
without any struggle .
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help
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to build a strong relationship between
students
and can obtain a wide range of knowledge.
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suggestions from their
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knowledge
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wisely. In conclusion, even though
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study
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some benefits ,
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believe
group
study
is
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prominent
method
of studying
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since that enables
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their ability.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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