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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs give information about the
proportion
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 of
phone
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subscribers
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 for mobile phones and fixed phones in 4 countries, from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of mobile
phone
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 subscriptions had an upward trend for India and Uruguay.
On the other hand
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, the distribution of fixed telephones has nearly stayed steady for all four countries. It can be observed that both mobile and fixed telephone
subscribers
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 trends remained stable and they were nearly the same in Eritrea.
However
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,
while
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 the
proportion
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 of fixed telephone users
stay
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 steady, the percentage of people who use mobile phones dramatically increased in India, from 0 to just below 100%.
Moreover
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, the
proportion
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 of
phone
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 users in the UK stayed relatively steady for a decade.
Whereas
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 the UK had the highest distribution of both
phone
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subscribers
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 until 2009,
after
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this
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 date the
proportion
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 of mobile device
subscribers
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 in Urguay was more than in the UK.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, phone, subscribers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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