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The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
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The bar chart describes the length
traveled
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travelled
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 that person through during a
week
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week's
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 use of some
vorious
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various
 of transportation in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
Overall
, the trend
was
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apply
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a
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apply
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rise
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 when
a
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the
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 bus
become
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became
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 the transport that through the longest reach trip
while
 the lowest number
in
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by
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 Air and Bicycle. In 1990, the total number of
way
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ways
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that
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apply
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achieved by five different types of vehicles was 100
kilometers
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kilometres
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 when bus stood at 40
kilometers
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kilometres
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.
This
 was the highest length of 5 kinds of transport
while
 the lowest number was Air that only took below 5
kilometers
.
Furthermore
,
Rail
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the Rail
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 was standing there
around
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for around
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 38
kilometers
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kilometres
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.
Then
, followed by Motorbike and Bicycle were about 5%. Meanwhile, 10 years later, the whole
distances
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distance
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traveled
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travelled
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 was almost 110
kilometers
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kilometres
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 where the bus led
amoung
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among
 a few transport that slightly rose around 41kilometres, and rail was
a
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an
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 increase approximately 40kilometres.
In addition
, the air gradually increased almost 0,5 kilometres.
In contrast
,
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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 and
Motorbike
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Motorbikes
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were
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showed
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 a small decline
in
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apply
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around 0,3 and 0,5
kilometers
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kilometres
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 each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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