The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The given charts illustrate
on
how much of the usage Change preposition
apply
energy
household Change preposition
of energy
along with
greenhouse gas
emissions
created from the energy
use
in typical Australian residents.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that heating activities has
become the biggest Change the verb form
have
energy
consumptions
Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
while
water heating, positioning on
Change preposition
in
the
second place in Correct article usage
apply
energy
use
create
Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
highest
greenhouse Correct article usage
the highest
gas
emissions
.
In terms of heating activities, both heating and water heating made up 42% and 30%, respectively, in energy
use
. While
water heating create
Change the verb form
creates
highest
greenhouse Correct article usage
the highest
gas
emissions
, accounting for 32% of the porportion
, Correct your spelling
proportion
suprisingly
, heating has more Correct your spelling
surprisingly
environmentally-friendly
which only Correct your spelling
environmentally friendly
gather
15%.
Regarding others, Correct subject-verb agreement
gathers
refrigration
which mainly Correct your spelling
refrigeration
refrigerator
use
in Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
freezer
and Fix the agreement mistake
freezers
refrigrator
using household Correct your spelling
refrigerator
energy
accounted for 7%, while
it quiet
Correct your spelling
quite
produce
higher Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
emissions
at 14%. Cooling and lightning, both use
least
Change the article
the least
energy
, accounting for 2% and 4%, respectively. When combined both
, the Correct pronoun usage
apply
gas
emissions
production only at just above one-fifth of the total percentage. On the other hand
, other appliances use
15% energy
and produce Change preposition
of energy
at
just above one-fourth, Change preposition
apply
become
the second most emitting sector.Wrong verb form
becoming
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emissions, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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