In many countries today, both men and women need to work full time. Therefore, some people think men and women should share household task equally (e.g. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times

household

tasks

are

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increased. It is a highly debatable issue whether

parents

should share

household

tasks

, or whether it is the women's responsibility.

This

essay will outline the benefits of helping each other

in home

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in-home

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activity

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activities

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. Working both males and females

togother

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together

has a vital role in social life. It promotes

the

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sense of collaboration between

parents

which can lead to

the

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apply

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empathy.

For example

, the result of conducted research at Glasgow University illustrates that 90% of

parents

live

more happy

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happier

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life

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lives

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than those who depend only on

the

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apply

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womens

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women

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Furthermore

, helping each other

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with

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household

tasks

may open doors to

explore

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exploring

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a new experience. If the men try to cook food,

potentialy

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potentially

they will be empowered to cook various types of food.

Thus

, they could learn and gain experience from each other.

In addition

parents

can learn to become independent people.

this

may

helps

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help

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them when they travel abroad.

For instance

, my friend Fatma her husband always helps her and now he is self-reliant as he can clean and wash clothes when he

travel

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travels

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abroad.

Moreover

, the benefits of helping each other

not

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are not

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only limited to

household

tasks

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apply

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but

also

it has

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have

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a big impact on saving time. Men and women would often finish their work early and without effort. To illustrate, my sister has enough time to

visite

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visit

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her

relevents

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relatives

and shopping

due to

her husband's help. So,

this

can make the family more

relax

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relaxed

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. In conclusion,

boosts

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boosting

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self-esteems

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self-esteem

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gains

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gaining

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many skills ,

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being

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independent people and

save

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saving

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time are all the benefits of sharing

household

tasks

Therefore

, the idea of depending only on

womens

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women

women's

shold

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should

be stopped. Both

male

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males

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and

female

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females

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should have a

balance

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balanced

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life.

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task achievement

Try to elaborate more on your arguments with additional supporting details. For instance, further explanation on how undertaking household tasks specifically boosts self-esteem and independence would be helpful.

coherence cohesion

Work on the logical structure of your paragraphs to ensure a smoother flow. Some points started abruptly and could benefit from better transitions.

introduction conclusion present

Your introduction sets up the discussion well by addressing the two viewpoints and stating what the essay will cover.

supported main points

You've used relevant examples to support your arguments, which strengthens your essay and makes it more relatable.

introduction conclusion present

The conclusion aptly summarizes the key points discussed in the essay, reinforcing your stance.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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