The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show the proportion of
energy
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that is
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generated and consumed in the world by a range of different
sources
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. It is noticeable that there
is
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are
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considerable differences between the two. When we look at the
energy
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which we consume
it is clear that
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most of that
energy
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came
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from fossil fuels with over 75% coming from these traditional methods. The majority of which was from oil at 34.3%. Alternative
energy
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sources
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such
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as nuclear and
hydro power
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hydropower
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made up a relatively small proportion at just 6.5 and 2.2 %
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respectively
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. These figures are very different when looking at the
energy
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that we generated. Again, the majority was from fossil fuels at approximately 65%.
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However
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However,
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oil made up a fairly small percentage at just 6.7%.
This
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meant that we were generating considerably more
energy
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from alternative
sources
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with nuclear and hydro being 15.7 and 16.1%
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respectively
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.
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, we can see that there are similarities in the production and
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utilisation of fuel and that we are heavily dependent on fossil fuels.
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, it is perhaps reassuring that
last
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year we generated significantly more
energy
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from renewable
sources
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than from oil.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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