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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph
illutrate
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illustrates
illustrate
 the
crime
rate
depend
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 on the
age
 and pie chart
describe
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describes
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 the
ratio
 of different
crime
tyeps
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types
 for the recent year,in England.
Overall
,
crime
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the crime
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rate
 at the
age
 of 20
is
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peaked, when getting older after 20 it decreased
stedly
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steadily
. There are 4
crime
 types, violent
crime
, property
crime
, drug
crime
 and public order
crime
 with the raito, 46%, 23%, 22%,
9
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and 9
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% respectively. In
line
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a line
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 graph,
first
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the first
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 8
age
 has no
crime
rate
,
however
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however,
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 after the
age
 of
8
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8,
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it is
incerasing
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increasing
steadly
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steadily
. Between 12 and 16 it
is
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went up sharply and peaked at 20. From 20 to 28
crime
rate
 went down dramatically. And after 28 it
fallen
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falls
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 till
age
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the age
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 of 60. In
pie
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a pie
the pie
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 chart,
biggest
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the biggest
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ratio
 is violent
crime
.
Propert
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Property
crime
 and drug
crime
 had nearly
same
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the same
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ratio
. Public order
crime
 has the lowest
ratio
, just below the 10.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, rate, age, ratio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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