Higher education could be funded in three ways. all costs paid by government, all costs paid by students or student paying all costs through a government loan. what are the advantages of these choices?

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task response

Try to elaborate more on each of the funding methods with specific and clear examples to provide a more comprehensive argument.

coherence cohesion

Work on the logical flow of paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next one and that sentences within each paragraph are logically connected.

coherence cohesion

There are several grammar and spelling mistakes. Special attention should be paid to common errors such as 'socity' instead of 'society' and 'defintly' instead of 'definitely'.

introduction conclusion

You have attempted to introduce the topic and summarize the benefits of each funding method in your conclusion, which shows an understanding of essay structure.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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180 words

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the popluation in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In many countries,people are now living longer than ever before. Some people sayan aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change and developing countries. other believe that all countries should have the same responsibilties towards protectiong the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.