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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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The two charts illustrate
visits
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 to and from the
UK
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 between 1979-1999 and the bar graph demonstrates the most famous countries visited by
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 inhabitants in 1999.It is obvious that
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 the least
visits
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 to and from the
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seems
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were
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 in 1979
then
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France
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 topped
country
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the country
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 visited by the
UK
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 in 1999, in the same year
Turkey
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 was the lowest country visited by
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residents
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.In 1999 the amount of
the
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visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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 increased by approximately more than 5 times compared to 1979. In 1979
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 consisted of almost 10 million
people
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then
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 we can see that same year
visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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 were a little bit more than other ones. Same year we can see almost
same
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the same
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 results but
visits
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 abroad by
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Uk
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UK
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residents
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 a little bit more than
other
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the other
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 one. We can’t see a noticeable change until 1984,
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, after 1984 we can see a conspicuous change
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visits
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in visits
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 to and from
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UK
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the UK
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. After 1989,
visits
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 to and from the
UK
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 showed an increased tendency all the way up. In 1999, we can see the best results of
in
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visits
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 to and from the
UK
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.
Visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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 increased almost 5 times, in the other one we can’t see a significant change
nevertheless
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, it increased approximately more than 3 times. In the second
chart
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chart,
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France
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 has the most significant pose than the other countries.More than 10 million
people
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 visit
to
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the
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France
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.
On the contrary
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,
Turkey
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hasn’t
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doesn’t
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 an important pose which
people
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 don’t come to
this
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 country.
Additi onally
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, between zero and 5 million
people
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 visited
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Turkey
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 in 1999.Spain,the USA,
Greece
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and Greece
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 show us
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average
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 results which we can see
people
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 don’t these countries visited as
France
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 but visitors don’t less than
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Turkey
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visits, uk, france, turkey, residents, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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