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The charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.

The charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.
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The two pie charts compare the percentages of British
students
 at a university in England who were able to speak
languages
 other than English in 2000 and 2010. In 2000, 30% of
students
 could speak Spanish, which was the most common second
language
. The proportion of
students
 speaking no other
language
besides
 English stood at 20%. 15% of
students
 could speak another
language
, followed by 15% who spoke only French. The figures for
students
 who spoke only German or two other
languages
 were both 10%. In 2010, the percentage of
students
 who could speak Spanish increased to 35%, making it the most significant rise. The proportion of
students
 who spoke only English dropped to 10%, showing a decrease in monolingualism. Both French and German speakers decreased to 10%. The percentage of
students
 speaking another
language
 remained unchanged at 15%,
while
 the figure for those speaking two other
languages
 grew slightly to 15%.
Overall
, the data suggests an increase in multilingualism among British
students
 over the decade, particularly in the use of Spanish and other
languages
.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • significantly
  • increase
  • decrease
  • multilingual
  • bilingual
  • linguistic skills
  • global context
  • notable
  • trend
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