The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
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The data below compares information about
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of
members
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for different activities at a social
center
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centre
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in
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the Austalian
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Austalian
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Australian
city
Malbroune
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Melbourne
from 2000 to 2020.  
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the highest number of
members
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was
on
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in
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film
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the film
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club and the least was
on
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in
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musical performances.   Film club, in 2000 there were 64 participants, and
this
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figure remained almost unchanged in these 20 years. In martial arts,
members
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were the same, at about 35 in both 2000 and 2020. From 2000 to 2010, there were no huge changes in table tennis, but from 2010 and 2020,
this
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figure increased to more than twice. In
amatuer
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amateur
dramatics, there were about 26 participants in 2000 and 2005, and
this
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figure decreased gradually to about 5 in 15 years. And the
last
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one, musical performances,
in
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apply
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2005 there were no
members
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;
however
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,
from
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in
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2010, participants started to join the club, and in 2020 it contained almost 20 people.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words members with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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