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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In recent times, most nations’ residents are able to go to the supermarkets and purchase the dishes which
produced
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 around the whole world. I
am strongly believe
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 that
this
 is an affirmative development, because customers can experience the taste of
foods
 that they have never seen and those products provide
a
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various
choice
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 of meals for humans.
Firstly
, the food that
performed
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 from different countries could be seen
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as interesting
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 for the people who have not tried
them
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. Since,
modern
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 lifestyle of individuals
getting
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 boring year by year they want to feel something new. Mostly they went
to
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abroad and
try
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traditional
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foods
 of that country,
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 to
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 they
cannot
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 afford them there. In that case, they could experience it again from the shops that have the meals from overseas.
For example
, in the past nobody saw the Japanese food called ‘ramen’,
however
 now ramen become
to
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the
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 popular food in the daily life of people, and they can get
them
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it
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 in every market.
Secondly
, sometimes residents suffer from the shortage of
foods
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food
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 in their nations.
Nevertheless
, it can be solved
via
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by
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 transporting some
foods
 from
the
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oversea
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overseas
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. It means that those dishes can be a solution
for
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to
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 the global problem
such
 as hunger.
For example
,
majority
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the majority
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countries
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of countries
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 in Africa have
issue
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issues
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about ensure
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with ensuring
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 citizens with
foods
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food
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 and water, but now the situation getting better In conclusion,
due to
 these provided reasons and examples, I am sure that buying meals in stores nowadays is a
favorable
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 development for the whole world. Since it can be salvations for
the
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most people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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